plm0099 发表于 2021-5-27 14:09   全显示 1楼
从本文看，情节引入胜，表弟看到了丝袜的激动，妈妈的表情、表现，特别是对待表弟的感情，真的非常真实。但是文章结尾收的太快了，感觉刚刚才勾起想看完的兴趣，就已经结束了。从文章整体看，完全可以在写得详细一点，将文章拉长，写一个长篇小说应该非常不错，希望作者继续加油，不断完善，出优秀作品。
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